Oct 27---First Draft

My first draft was not written by computer so i can not psot it.  I used the spyder web type draft to make sure that i covered all the issues that i wanted to talk about.  i put L.L in the middle and went from there.  The one issue that i left out was that of  girls in L.L.  THis topic was not discussed until i had already turned in my draft.  I was going ot focus on race only but this is an interesting point and helps to prove that L.L is inclusionary.  this was the only topic missing form my outline.  I also included notes on quotations that i would use.  these note are useless to anyone else because they are so criptic.  HTe sturcture of the essay was alos changed.  My first draft was not very well organized.  I feel as if i was alover the place.  Later, the paper gained more structure as i continued to work on it.  Even thought i included girls, the focus of my paper was the two all black teams. they donimate the discussion and show the most high class standard in how L.L opperates.